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07-16-2010, 04:49 PM

<blockquote id="quote">quote<hr height="1" noshade id="quote">Originally posted by WARDAH
 
majmooah a tazaad hai hasti mairi
hajoom e insaan hay or virran basti mairi
samundar hai pur sakon sahil hai ro baro
or beech bhanwar hai kashti mairi
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Kasim
main hoon or majmooah a tizaad hay hasti meri
hajoom a insaaan hay or viraan basti meri

samunder hay pur sakoon sahil hay ro baroo
beech bhanwar hay or parayshaan kasti meri.

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Good effort by both, Wardah nay first and last sentence ko milaya hay jabka kasim nay first second ko or thir fourth ko. Jis shair main 4 setences hun un ko poetry main Rubai kehtay hain or Rubai ka aik usool yay hay k Each Rubai stanza is supposed to be a quatrain, in which lines 1, 2 and 4 all rhyme. Therefore the rhyme sounds as AABA.

Ap dono nay is usool ko follow kia hay Hasti meri, bati meri and kashti meri ki rythm ko milaya hay. So usoolan dono k braber marks aay hain.

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