Lets be poet

[Kasim]

case sensitive ka topic abhi aeyga issi liyeah reference diyeah hay
badshah shb ko decide kernay doo khap na daloo
warna kar-a-sarkar main khalal dalnay per woe tumhain forum badar ker dain gay lol abb baith k sochti rahoo k main nay kaha kia hay

[WARDAH]

eng weak hogi but urdu nahin k smjh na sakon. . .btaey na badshah slamt mairy ashaar achy thy ya jo termeem kasim qafia waly ny ki wo?????

[ciapk]

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majmooah a tazaad hai hasti mairi
hajoom e insaan hay or virran basti mairi
samundar hai pur sakon sahil hai ro baro
or beech bhanwar hai kashti mairi
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Kasim
main hoon or majmooah a tizaad hay hasti meri
hajoom a insaaan hay or viraan basti meri

samunder hay pur sakoon sahil hay ro baroo
beech bhanwar hay or parayshaan kasti meri.


Decision

Good effort by both, Wardah nay first and last sentence ko milaya hay jabka kasim nay first second ko or thir fourth ko. Jis shair main 4 setences hun un ko poetry main Rubai kehtay hain or Rubai ka aik usool yay hay k Each Rubai stanza is supposed to be a quatrain, in which lines 1, 2 and 4 all rhyme. Therefore the rhyme sounds as AABA.

Ap dono nay is usool ko follow kia hay Hasti meri, bati meri and kashti meri ki rythm ko milaya hay. So usoolan dono k braber marks aay hain.

[WARDAH]

yuppy!! hahahohhehe B . . . . daikha kasim qafia waly or chonky pehli rubai mairi thi to us py huq bhi maira ziada bnta hai infact kasim k termeem kr k shaya krny py mai us py case bhi krny ka huq rkhti hon,heheheh khair CIAPK BADSHAH SALAMAT ap k insaaf py hum khush huae.badshah salamt ka iqbal buland ho. hehehe

[bizmen]

The Queeen of my fantasies
Every direction i see your shadows
whenever i forward my hands, you disappear
come and hold my hands in yours

i see you in my dreams
i see you when i am waking
i see you with a fresh smile
i see you with sad eyes
i hear the splash of water
and then
you come to me so fresh
your body covered with flowers
i kiss you on your feet
you bring the sweet fragrance in my life
in your eyes i see a strange dream
in my eyes, you stay forever
Magic
there is magic around you
i can't stop my heart from calling your name
o, the angel of my dreams!
tell me, where have you gone
why can't i find you now?
which world do you stay now?
why can't i hear your voice?
why don't you come to me?
why?
i am always here for you
i'll always wait for you
please don't say that you won't come
don't think of me this way
how can i tell you that now, i am not me
what did you lose?
i lost my heart
i put my heart in one hand and my soul in the other
you took both from me
but you cared not
you thought, i am playing with you
and you lost both, my heart and my soul
you did no good to me
without you, i can not be at rest
believe me, this is true
don't doubt me now
don't go now and so, test my patience
lets stay together
now and forever
until we're six feet under
even then we'll stay together
lets stay together
lets not think of this world
lets make our own world
lets walk on our way to that world
the world that is yours, mine and our kids
lets build our own sweet home
a home in the shades of trees
besides the beautiful beach
where we walk, your hands in mine
where i can see the sunset in your eyes
where i can steel the juices of your lips
where i sleep in your arms
each morning, with no more fears
as i see you close besides me
then i'll pray for no change in life
coz i'll get my babe by my side
we'll sleep together, happy and satisfied
or we can wake-up amidst night
be laughing or just smile
wait just a second now
love's easier lost than found
so learn my sweety learn
learn how to love
find me, love me, hold me
i'm easier to be found
wasting time,
thats all you'll do
if you are looking for someone
come and have me
i don't want what you think i need
reach
reach to me
can't you see i need you?
i don't want what you think i need
i'm gonna let you sleep
i pray the lord to hold
you tight
good night

[WARDAH]

ye tumhari apni hai??? ye poetry hai ya taqreer ?? i mean is qadr lmbi. . .english mai qafia radeef ni hota?? shair ko kahan sy kahan tk jor k prhon? end hi koi ni bus jumly hain.waisy gud hain )

[bizmen]

you are right, yeh poetry hai bhi aur nahee bhee...its kind of Prose-Poetry...jaise urdu mein 'Azad poetry' hoti hai. and apne liye likha tha, qafiya radeef, poetry waghaira chor kar meanings par zyada dhayan diya. and suna to hoga keh jo likhta hai, usi ko sab samjh ata hai,,,baqi sab to apna apna matlab nikal rahe hote hain [)]

[WARDAH]

o yup u r rite. . . keep it up biz biz biz mkhy.

[raza 123]

ab ke ham bichhare to shaayad kabhii Khvaabon main milain
jis tarah suukhe hue phuul kitaabon main milain

dhondh ujare hue logon main vafaa ke motii
ye Khazaane tujhe mumkin hai Kharaabon main milain

tuu Khudaa hai na meraa ishq farishton jaisaa
donon insaan hain to kyon itane hijaabon main milain

Gam-e-duniyaa bhii Gam-e-yaar main shaamil kar lo
nashaa barataa hai sharabain jo sharaabon main milain

aaj ham daar pe khainche gaye jin baaton par
kyaa ajab kal wo zamaane ko nisaabon main milain

ab na wo main hon na tu hai na wo maazii hai `Faraaz'
jaise do shaKhs tamannaa ke saraabon main milain

[ciapk]

Ab ya yna keh daina k yay b ap nay azadi say azad poetry likhi hay -)

[raza 123]

hahahaha P [D][D][D][D][D][D][D][)][)][)]

[WARDAH]

ciapk. . .ye biz ny nai raza ny likhi hai
raza. . .apni likhni thi kisi poet ki ni,so pehli wali ko to kr do tum delete ya poetry k topic mai ja k tauko. . .or ye jo tum ny dosri likhi hai wo kuch kuch tumhari kuch kuch churai hui lg rai hai.haan bhi kbhi kbhi jhoot bhi acha lg hi jata hai.but ye duck kisko bola hai ?? hmm?? (kisi ny mujhko emoticon bnany sy mna kiya hai so bta rai hon k ye q gusy mai kiya hai mainy)

[raza 123]

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<br />you are right, yeh poetry hai bhi aur nahee bhee...its kind of Prose-Poetry...jaise urdu mein 'Azad poetry' hoti hai. and apne liye likha tha, qafiya radeef, poetry waghaira chor kar meanings par zyada dhayan diya. and suna to hoga keh jo likhta hai, usi ko sab samjh ata hai,,,baqi sab to apna apna matlab nikal rahe hote hain [)]
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poetry samjhne ki cheez nahi hai ... isse mehsus kia jata hai ... jin logon ko poetry pasand nahi woh log issey samjh samjh ker perhte hain .. .

[raza 123]

@ Kasim

dil main wafa ki hai talab, lab pai sawal bhi nahin
ham hain hisar-e-dard main, us ko khayal bhi nahin
woh jo ana parast hai , main bhi wafa parast hoon
us ki misal bhi nahin, meri misal bhi nahin


poet tu bohut hain yahan P

plus its not written by me P

[ciapk]

Smaj smaj kr nai prhtay, poetry ka usay he pta hota hay jis nay likhi hay k usnay kia likha hay, baqi loog apnay apnay khyalat k mutabiq uski apni apni translation kr laitay hain k iska yay matlab ho skta hay -)